Overall grade C
Mr bush- WWW: Some good research into your topic from a variety of sources.
EBI: You need to focus more on the internet aspect, especially in conclusion.
2nd page: WWW: a good use of research used and very good examples to back up your point.
EBI: include theorists (stereotypes, Kats, Levi Straus)
3rd page: WWW: good use of representation surrounding artistm and goof use of how it affects the audience, through instructions such as twitter. EBI: theory regarding representations is added
4th page: WWW: good use of representation and stereotypes clear understanding and portrayal and media effects was used.EBI: owner ship and control, news values,moral panic,reality tv were considered. (At least 1 either of these)Also censorship should be considered
5th page: WWW: good information and research used with clear example
EBI: add at least 2 theories on this page such as feminism theories and representation theory such as perians or med.
6th page : WWW: good range of footnotes and book/websites
EBI: need to make font and size the same,take out book title and add page numbers.
7th page: WWW: a lot of detail well formatted very few mistakes
EBI: One or two lines look like they're in the wrong place, page number not needed.
Paragraph continuous intro: Within today's society, women are often portrayed in a lower status than the male gender and Perkins theory goes within this as Miley Cyrus has been through a drastic change from being a Disney star to being influenced by society to acting like a 'whore' which shows that she has been affected by society and has been seen to have a lower status than men.
Paragraph conclusion: Overall the internet has impacted upon the representation of women in the music industry as social networking sites such as YouTube/Facebook share music videos which may have a very big influence to women as they may want to mimic what they are seeing going with the hypodermic needle theory...
Level 3: for all pages except page number 5 (Level 2) No theories include..
Mr bush- WWW: Some good research into your topic from a variety of sources.
EBI: You need to focus more on the internet aspect, especially in conclusion.
2nd page: WWW: a good use of research used and very good examples to back up your point.
EBI: include theorists (stereotypes, Kats, Levi Straus)
3rd page: WWW: good use of representation surrounding artistm and goof use of how it affects the audience, through instructions such as twitter. EBI: theory regarding representations is added
4th page: WWW: good use of representation and stereotypes clear understanding and portrayal and media effects was used.EBI: owner ship and control, news values,moral panic,reality tv were considered. (At least 1 either of these)Also censorship should be considered
5th page: WWW: good information and research used with clear example
EBI: add at least 2 theories on this page such as feminism theories and representation theory such as perians or med.
6th page : WWW: good range of footnotes and book/websites
EBI: need to make font and size the same,take out book title and add page numbers.
7th page: WWW: a lot of detail well formatted very few mistakes
EBI: One or two lines look like they're in the wrong place, page number not needed.
Paragraph continuous intro: Within today's society, women are often portrayed in a lower status than the male gender and Perkins theory goes within this as Miley Cyrus has been through a drastic change from being a Disney star to being influenced by society to acting like a 'whore' which shows that she has been affected by society and has been seen to have a lower status than men.
Paragraph conclusion: Overall the internet has impacted upon the representation of women in the music industry as social networking sites such as YouTube/Facebook share music videos which may have a very big influence to women as they may want to mimic what they are seeing going with the hypodermic needle theory...
Level 3: for all pages except page number 5 (Level 2) No theories include..
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